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There should be a way to make the book pages not so rigid when she's turning them.

 

Those snails should fall faster. Plop!

 

I'm redoing Lena Turing the pages with a bend in the page.. thanks for noticing robcat

I'll post the new renders

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There should be a way to make the book pages not so rigid when she's turning them.

 

Those snails should fall faster. Plop!

 

 

 

robcat here is the newly rendered scenes, thanks again for pointing the out,

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Nice page turns, maybe just a bit more "plop" of those snails?

 

Who is she talking to? Herself? I suppose witches, being solitary would be self-talkers... :lol:

 

OR....can this scene, as it is mostly explanatory, be condensed? Suggested dialogue -

 

"I need no oracle to tell ME what to do"

 

"The ancient book of shadows has the spell I need"

 

(fairy squeaks in protest)

 

"Yes, this will do quite nicely..."

 

"If I follow the spell precisely -

I'll finish with rotting entrails,

pinch of newt, a handful of snails!"

 

"Foulest of humours,

boiling and hissing

form vaporous tendrils,

a ghostly apparition!"

Short, succinct, to the point. And it seems more a chant than a monologue.

 

This is all coming along so well!

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OR....can this scene, as it is mostly explanatory, be condensed? Suggested dialogue -

 

I really like how you trimmed down script. so much so that I started re-placing the voice track ,and I like it so much better I'm redoing a couple of the animation

 

I had a hard time converting this page to the movie.as you saw. the voice part was done, a few years back., so making changes is difficult.

 

this is the original script from the book . actually Lena is talking to Grim her familiar

 

. I really appreciate the time it took. I'll post the movie part as soon as its done again

 

thanks so much Jessie

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OR....can this scene, as it is mostly explanatory, be condensed? Suggested dialogue -

 

I really like how you trimmed down script. so much so that I started re-placing the voice track ,and I like it so much better I'm redoing a couple of the animation

 

I had a hard time converting this page to the movie.as you saw. the voice part was done, a few years back., so making changes is difficult.

 

this is the original script from the book . actually Lena is talking to Grim her familiar

 

. I really appreciate the time it took. I'll post the movie part as soon as its done again

 

thanks so much Jessie

 

Hum the picture did not show up, i'll post it with the improved part

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