just a yes/no will do: do you have the entire storyline ready in your head?
"Life After Murder" would seem less obvious. for some reason forming it as a question made me soooo wanna decide i knew everything about the story already. Colfax is a perfect name. A name of the mining town is probably something equally good.
this is just nibbling around the edges of you pitch then, nothing to do with the story;
when asked about real, conflicts, you reply with a detailed environment.
is your hero a window to a world that will mirror ours by contrast/ mirror the eternal human condition?
from your pitch i got the impression it's about the man only.
he's all hero and no change, he'll be asking the questions so we get to learn what we need to?
will you be spending time with detailed scenes from the life on that planet, or will it be about people interacting?
it's not wrong to lie your head off when squeezing 90 (?) minutes to one page, but it's good to get the general pointers/athmosphere in line with the content. in your case, maybe a short second chapter describing the world only would be just the thing. maybe the world is his biggest adversary.
merely writing words here, chatty;
Spade would avoid poolside, sitting in his room curtains half drawn with a hat, sunglasses, shirt and shoes, fanning himself furiously cursing at the boy bringing him a margherita pitcher instead of a JD like he ordered then grunting and giving him a big tip to amend. always happy to leave, never happy about the destination. reluctant, detatched.
Blade Runner is pitch black, larger than life, a Havana would be the underbelly and Colfax would be aquainted with the low lifes yet reluctant to leave the night and would have to be persuaded, blackmailed even, to leave. his journey is at a distance, allowing all characters room to build up a world bursting with detail. alienation bordering on pathological.
Firefly seems closest to your pitch, it's sunny with a mission to do good, hearty joking with a hand on the holster anyways. ready to leave anytime, faking laziness while doing so stating lone cowboy independence. a striking character and a generous helping of flaws would accompany that hero. a series' wealth of nuance can't be compared to films, and conflicts keep pouring in.
that was so many words i should get to watch it now?