This segment belongs near the beginning, right after the wizard banishes witch Lena.

. In the scene, where the wizard is writing on the book, it did not turn out as I hoped.
I remember a tutorial a few years back where they were writing with sprites, but don't remember it being in color. if anyone knows how to do the writing on the book , I hope they'll will share.

Looks pretty good to me. I like the sets.

Very nice.

It may be my volume level but I had a hard time making out what was being said in the dialogue. This was most likely due to distractions in the house on my end but I'm commenting on that aspect as I felt I missed important information. I need to go back and listen again but if the audience misses it the first time through the opportunity is lost.


The classic tutorial on writing with sprites is surely Mike Cossey's 'Writing with Sprites'.
You may want to approach it a little different but the lesson itself is still very relevant.

To change the color you can adjust the 'additive color' attribute of the spriticle.

JohnL3D has several tutorials on particle emitters/spriticles that can direct your efforts further.

One visual tweak ... it would be nice to have a different color on the top of the stairs. Maybe just a little darker? It would add a bit of contrast to the castle wall background and give a slightly better sense of place.

I came into your thread in the middle, and had a hard time picking up on what was happening, but I'm starting to see the story, and each part you post is more exciting.

Hi Rodney.
thank you for the write with sprites link. and the how to adjust it. I'll give it a try. I'll turn the volume up on the voice track, it's a importune part. thanks again

Hi Mouseman, some of the segments are out of order because i'm still redoing some. the different color on the stairs is a really good idea, thank you. and thanks for watching

Thanks Mark, i love the mist you created, it looks like clouds.