As a amateur animator everything seems to be a work in progress, with never being satisfied, This will make my third attempt with this next segment, I would like to introduce Onton a dark elf and his best friend Dracolleen. comments welcome

Very good character.

You may need to do a narrator over the top - I think it would take the pressure off of the animation to tell the whole story.

Hey those are good looking toon renders.

One suggestion I'd note is the skies in the background are maybe too flat. It makes them look too close to me.

Maybe they need a cloud or a gradient or something to help distance them.

A narrator could be a option, it wasn't what I had in mind, but it's something to consider there are a couple of key segments that have not been shown, because there're still being worked on. As the characters meet, the story should unfold, hopefully, . Thanks Martin

I'm re-rending part of the last segment again, and I added a sky. Thanks robcat. for your good advise, it dose look better